I am real big on creativity in life and I like art in most forms. However, I haven't been doing much creating in the past several years. Not sure why. I guess life has a way of takiong over when your not looking and replacing the good stuff with other stuff. Thankfully my friends at the Samich forums got me back into some of my old creative habits. (Thanks Guys) Below is the first of several short poems that poured out. I don't know how good it is and is difficult to interperate, but I had a great tiem writing it and I may post more later. (Or maybe make a poetry Blog) Hmmm....
Title: "Re-fracture"
I see with another mans eyes.
The surroundings contain vibrant mysteries.
Hearing words in silence still.
Movement in time or time in movement?
I don’t act in time,
Movement and time escape me.
Values of habit over instinct,
characters over a wire.
Scribing dreams and realities.
A silent movement of the willing,
I...the scream in stillness.
2 comments:
Nice Poem!! I like it a lot and it reminds me of some poems I read before about not being able to move or make a decision in life, kind of like being frozen in time while your mind is in a different time. Kind of disjointed between the body and the mind. I dont know if that was your intent since Im not so good at analysing poetry but I liked it a lot.
"A silent movement of the willing,
I...the scream in stillness."
I liked the ending a lot, kind of like your floating out in space and you make a movement but its almost incomprehensable and you scream but everything is silent and everything is so distant. It really provoked a lot of feeling and imagery from me.
A+
Thank you for the support V.
You actually interperated part of it very well.
The "I don't act in time, Movement and time escape me" does refer to my historical stagnance.
Even the ending as you mentioned has a note of the struggle within on that very same topic.
"...movement of the willing." reffering to the desire to move even when action is non-present and "scream in stillness" reffering to the intensity of the desire underneath the surface.
Some other explanations while im here. The first three lines alude to my Christian walk. Seeing things differetly than before, becoming aware of the things previously vailed from me, and hearing/feeling His call to me.
Lines 7-9 reffer to the shift in values from my old instincts to what must become new habits, my life and times online, and the re-creation process in new lives from old as well as putting thoughts to paper (or digital paper).
I wonder if it is a taboo to explain your own poetry... Like a magician telling giving away secrets and runining the mystery...
Oh well, I already typed it. =P
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